Definition paragraph
Lempeng
One of the popular food in
palangkaraya is lempeng . lempeng is usually
consumed by dayakness in palangkaraya. Lempeng is a cake that made by flour and
banana. It is unique food because local people in palangkaraya said is like
pizza form is circle. And named this food only find in palangkaraya. How to
make lempeng? Firstly, the materials are katans flour, papuys banana, sugar and
water. Secondly, mixed all of materials. After that prepare pan and give little
oil. Than, pour the batter into the pan and make circle form. Wait a minutes,
take a lempeng and served. Finally, lempeng is a simple and easy to make
not only Dayakness people but also another people.
Note
:
Dayakness :
Dayak etchnic in Central Borneo.
Katans flour : A
flour made by rice.
Papuyis Banana : Named of
Banana
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BalasHapusI think in this paragraph are repetitions are essentially the same, such as "plate is usually consumed by dayakness in Palangkaraya. The plates are cakes made with flour and bananas". The sentence is a major detail that is lacking dtulis repeated. And also sentences and writing are also less precise in writing words like disetelah point must be large letters but there is little phrase that might writer forgot.
BalasHapusI suggest you don't use the repeated words. This is not a procedure text but our task is to make the definition paragraphs about food , so just explain and should not give how to make that something in your paragraph.
BalasHapusMaybe you can use :
"One of the popular foods in Palangka Raya is lempeng . Lempeng is usually consumed by Dayakness in Palangka Raya. It is a cake that made by flour and banana. It is unique food because local people in palangkaraya said is like pizza form is circle. And named this food only find in Palangka Raya. Finally, Lempeng is a unique food from Palangka Raya."
Please attention the grammar. For example : Lempeng is usually consumed by Dayakness in Kalimantan ( it is wrong) you should write it "Lempeng usually consumed by Dayakness in Kalimantan". So please repair it. There are same sentences that should you repair.
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