Final Test Project
Step 1: brainstorming.
1. What is ‘palas bidan’ ?
2. How familiar ‘palas
bidan’ is for people in Kalimantan?
3. Why ‘palas
bidan’ is popular?
Step 1 : outline
Topic : One of
familiar custom in kalimantan especially banjar people is pala
bidan .
Supporting sentence: -
palas bidan is a ritual prayer for a newborn baby.
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Procession palas bidan begins by reading surah
Yasin for prophet Muhammad SAW.
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There are typical local cakes and coffee in
palas bidan rituals.
Concluding sentence
: The conclusion, palas bidan was
ceremony of banjar people to pray for newborn baby.
step 3:( first draft)
Palas bidan
One of familiar custom in kalimantan
especially banjar people is palas bidan
. It is a ritual prayer for a
newborn baby. this ritual as a form gratitude of parents to midwives
which helped birth of baby. In this event the parents of the baby provide requirements
such as rice, coconut, jawa sugar, and
chicken eggs. Procession palas bidan
begins by reading surah Yasin for prophet
Muhammad SAW. In the presence of guests
there is swing of yellow cloth with various jewelry. A newborn baby must swung alternately by the
parents , midwife, and guests . other than that, in the middle of guest served
typical local cakes as many as 41 kinds and coffee bitter and sweet coffee. The
conclusion, palas bidan was ceremony of banjar people to pray for newborn baby.
Note :
Palas bidan : the name of a traditional ceremony in Borneo.
Banjars : name of tribe in borneo
Jawa sugar : red sugar
I think it would be nice if in this paragraph of this section must pay attention to the coherence of a phrase like for instance "palas midwife procession begins by reading surah Yasin to the Prophet Muhammad. In front of the guests there are swings yellow fabric with a variety of jewelry."
BalasHapusPlease attention the capital letter and I think it be better if you gave statement "How is it event be popular at there ? "
BalasHapusI think you have to pay attention to your paragraph like capitalization and small letters . For example for at the beginning of the sentence, city names , the name of the tribe , and others.
BalasHapus